Saturday, July 31, 2010

Under Cover


Plainly hidden
Amidst the crowd,
Exhibiting only
What is necessary
To function,
To participate
Within
The charade.

Inner secrets
Heavily guarded
As personal treasure,
Locked away
From quizzical eyes
Longing to judge
And create
Unease.

Lost to a world
In need
Of originality,
The potential costs
Seemingly too dear.
The soul’s price
Remains, yet
Unconsidered.

This is both a Magpie Tale and a 55 Flash Fiction piece. Interested in reading others? Click here… http://magpietales.blogspot.com and here… http://g-man-mrknowitall.blogspot.com/

21 comments:

Sir Thomas said...

i so thought you might be talking about me... i was going down the line..
check
check
check
check...omg its me...lol

nice post!!!

Brian Miller said...

wicked cool...esp that last stanza...brings it home strong...nicely played...

Paul C said...

Life's charade and the need for completion...good exploration.

madamebutterfly said...

I enjoyed this Magpie - well done.

Monkey Man said...

Awesome poetic post. Such feeling.

Helen said...

For sure ... your Magpie qualifies as wonderful originality!!!

RA said...

Great job! I liked the way you brought it all home at the end. :)

g-man said...

Felicita's...
First of all, YOU can be as late as you want...You're from Canada!!
Secondly, I loved your 55.
excellent use of Both Formats!
Thirdly....WOW!!
Love your new Avatar pic.
Thank You...Galen

Jingle said...

touching and very wonderful tale!

dulce said...

Wow
Feli
You write like teh angel dear!
Related to this I am !

Great magpie/55!

Sir Thomas said...

hey...

love that new picture of you...

Its super hot...

kathew said...

ah yes-careful camouflage....well done!

willow said...

I love that opening line!

Sam Liu said...

The first stanza gripped me completely, it took my breath away. And then you continued to amaze and delight. There is a very profound message woven into the lines of this wonderful poem.

Carrie Burtt said...

Such a beautiful and powerful poem.
:-)

Fireblossom said...

Dare I eat a peach?

Love it, and thanks for the visit and comment!

Gabriela Abalo said...

poignant... powerful.

great take!

Words A Day said...

this reminds me of Emily Dickinson - well written!

Tumblewords: said...

Fine imagery in this beautiful piece!

Wild Rose said...

Well thought out and fantastic, i love magpie tales.

Wild Rose~

Stafford Ray said...

How did I miss this! What a case for living honestly and 'be damned'!
One of the best bits I've read.