Thursday, January 27, 2011

55-Over


Enveloped in bitter night,
We walk silently along our separate paths,
Time for any discussion long since gone.
The waning moon, near invisible,
Behind drifting patches
Of blackened clouds,
Illuminating briefly, though well enough
For all the grim reminders
Of both our indiscretions, to appear
Cast in unfortunate shadows
Laid bare across an icy trail.


55 Flash Fiction Friday: Compose a story in 55 words and report back
to the G-Man at http://g-man-mrknowitall.blogspot.com/ …every Friday.

19 comments:

moondustwriter said...

Bitter, unfortunately, grim - all powerful words painting that icy trail.

I hope you are posting some of your stuff over at One Stop Poetry

moonie smiles

Brian Miller said...

well this is certainly chilling...both our indiscretions...hmmm....

G-Man said...

Felicitas....
Damn we've missed you!
Beautiful and powerful.
Loved your 55 My Friend.
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

Shadow said...

this cuts close. well done!

Alice Audrey said...

BOTH? That doesn't bode well.

anthonynorth said...

Great power in these words. Excellent.

Belinda said...

Sounds like a hopeless situation. Great writing.

Larry said...

Love it as usual
Perfect kiss

Eric 'Bubba' Alder said...

So cold and sad. Lots of emotion in your 55, Felicitas.

flaubert said...

A very sad tale. Nicely written.
Thanks for visiting my blog and commenting on my poem:)
Pamela

Monkey Man said...

So many blanks to fill in. This says so much yet leaves me wanting so much more.

RNSANE said...

Very intense and filled with emotion. So sad.

Mine is at:

http://rnsane.blogspot.com/2011/01/friday-flash-55-biggest-loser-january.html#links

Mama Zen said...

Gorgeous and cold. Very cold.

Noelle said...

sad and deep ... gives me the shivers.

Raven said...

Has the cold feel of lovers parting...tragically beautiful.

Ella said...

This is powerful, thought provoking and personal~ I love your imagery; You painted it so well!

Thanks for visiting me~

Jannie Funster said...

Boy, I sure hope my past indiscretions stay in the shadows of time! :)

xo

Dino said...

Very nice this metamorphosis.

Personally I do not see it so
"cool" .. but it is our thought for a fleeting memory.

I say that the shadows can also be unhappy, but .. they can never be separated.

Emerging From The Fire said...

Deep. I love it.