Enveloped in bitter night,
We walk silently along our separate paths,
Time for any discussion long since gone.
The waning moon, near invisible,
Behind drifting patches
Of blackened clouds,
Illuminating briefly, though well enough
For all the grim reminders
Of both our indiscretions, to appear
Cast in unfortunate shadows
Laid bare across an icy trail.
55 Flash Fiction Friday: Compose a story in 55 words and report back
to the G-Man at http://g-man-mrknowitall.blogspot.com/ …every Friday.
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19 comments:
Bitter, unfortunately, grim - all powerful words painting that icy trail.
I hope you are posting some of your stuff over at One Stop Poetry
moonie smiles
well this is certainly chilling...both our indiscretions...hmmm....
Felicitas....
Damn we've missed you!
Beautiful and powerful.
Loved your 55 My Friend.
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...G
this cuts close. well done!
BOTH? That doesn't bode well.
Great power in these words. Excellent.
Sounds like a hopeless situation. Great writing.
Love it as usual
Perfect kiss
So cold and sad. Lots of emotion in your 55, Felicitas.
A very sad tale. Nicely written.
Thanks for visiting my blog and commenting on my poem:)
Pamela
So many blanks to fill in. This says so much yet leaves me wanting so much more.
Very intense and filled with emotion. So sad.
Mine is at:
http://rnsane.blogspot.com/2011/01/friday-flash-55-biggest-loser-january.html#links
Gorgeous and cold. Very cold.
sad and deep ... gives me the shivers.
Has the cold feel of lovers parting...tragically beautiful.
This is powerful, thought provoking and personal~ I love your imagery; You painted it so well!
Thanks for visiting me~
Boy, I sure hope my past indiscretions stay in the shadows of time! :)
xo
Very nice this metamorphosis.
Personally I do not see it so
"cool" .. but it is our thought for a fleeting memory.
I say that the shadows can also be unhappy, but .. they can never be separated.
Deep. I love it.
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